I have tried a couple of times to read Greed by Viljami J. I made it twenty percent on this most recent attempt, but I am finally giving up and calling this a DNF. The story seems to revolve around Ethan and Gabriel, two lifelong friends and unlikeable criminals, who within the opening pages of the story attempt to rob an old man, determine they’re going to plunder the wealth of Mount Valhalla, and meet a pair of siblings (a tough sister and her effeminate but not gay – the author lets us know – brother). The four determine to travel together because...sure...and they make it to a town where there are prostitutes, which is cool because Gabriel is, “no stranger to non-platonic relationships with women.”
I finished the chapter before I tapped out. Ethan calls his friend/brother “G” and the sister character says “y’all” a few times. Tonally, the story is all over the place. It tells and never shows. The narrator head hops to tell us what everyone is thinking and feeling. The characters are unlikable. The writing lacks any depth. For me, this read more like an outline than a polished manuscript. I would humbly recommend a developmental editor.